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The Karaoke Killer

The karaoke killer
is setting out his stall.
He's killing country music
in the Black Country mall.

He mangle-strangles every song,
mallet-tongues it cartoon flat,
shreds it with a rictus grin
under a comedy cowboy hat.

He karaokes all traces
of desire and loss.
He makes Paper Roses sound the same
as The Old Rugged Cross.

No lovelorn lonely strangeness,
no lost highways and no sin.
If Hank Williams is in hell
this is what they're piping in.

3 Comments

At 2:45am on November 8th, 2009, Paul Grimsley said…: ba boom boom bap - i like the music in this; it has a definite strut, and a different flavour to some of your recent postings. very cool.

At 4:18am on November 9th, 2009, C. Boylan said…: Nice one; snappy, funny, good rhythm. I lost the flow a bit on the third stanza; would recommend dropping the 'He' in your third line, to reduce the number of syllables. Just a suggestion.
This was a fun read, thanks for sharing it.
Cheers for reading my prose piece too.

At 10:22am on November 10th, 2009, C. Boylan said…: Ok, thanks for that extra feedback. It reads differently when I'm searching for those resonances. Pretty cool.

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Posted November 7th, 2009 10:50am by:

Robert Warrington

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